I know I should be a bit more generous, but I have been in way too many poetry workshops to let something go. The original subject matter is cliche (except to the original artist, right (here)).
To be honest, untitled4life is a good artist which is what attracted me to the strip. Good stick figure comics are hard to come by. I also like the handwriting and color choices. I think if I were to offer a recommendation (other than the strip is a bit cliche), I would recommend a panel inserted between ps 2 & 3 showing the protagonist being dumped.
One of the strongest elements of the strip is p1 and the yellow, streetlight illumination. Good job there.